That was absolutely lovely. The wisdom of an innocent child is greater than one of an adult's sometimes. I really liked how you showed just as a realy child her age would've been like, with the screwed up nose, the hard time they have with pronouncing long words, and the simple way they see life. It was the sweetest thing I've seen.
I loved you connected all the different points you had in the story, the simple sweetness in all of it, and how you ended it with him spiking the punch just as they would've done, and how all he had to do was to look for them to find them. And although I can't really explain it, I love the line where he says "They’re scared of us, he thought. They were scared of grief.". It really does seem true, because people are always uncomfortable when people are greiving.
It was lovely, it really was. Major love to you for it! the title was absolutely fabulous as well. very fitting.
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Date: 2005-09-25 03:23 pm (UTC)I loved you connected all the different points you had in the story, the simple sweetness in all of it, and how you ended it with him spiking the punch just as they would've done, and how all he had to do was to look for them to find them. And although I can't really explain it, I love the line where he says "They’re scared of us, he thought. They were scared of grief.". It really does seem true, because people are always uncomfortable when people are greiving.
It was lovely, it really was. Major love to you for it! the title was absolutely fabulous as well. very fitting.
~Crystal